Ode to my 2g phone
Dear 2g phone, 2g phone
your so blue and white.
I'm scared to wake you up
cause your back might break someday
2g phone 2g phone
you have so many scars.
They're all over your face.
You need plastic surgery.
2g phone 2g phone
I'ts hard to punch you
cause your so little like an ant.
I really need to touch.
2g phone 2g phone
I want to change you someday.
Your so dumb like fish
I need a smarter phone
your friend, Dohyun.
Dohyun,
답글삭제I like how you used repetition throughout your ode. It is well-done but try to use more descriptive language and metaphors when writing an ode.
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답글삭제Donald,
답글삭제It is me your mom.
you should write " you are" instead of "your".
You are so dumb like fish. You are so blue.
please love your phone. It is your phone that makes you communicate with your friends,even though it is slow and not pretty. It has devoted its life for you. you should not betray it. Hahaha.
Hi!
답글삭제Nice ode to your 2g phone! You made good use of repetition, but you have to try to use more personifications and metaphors. Keep working hard~
-Yongwook, Oh (Writing TA)
Hey it was really touching ode haha^^
답글삭제And I really love the rhymes that you used for the 2g phone!
Nice Ode~!